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    dots Submission Name: never let her godots

    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsnever let her godots

    the lase tear falls from her eyes
    as you tell her goodbye
    you kiss her and promis her
    that no matter what
    you will always love her
    but if you loved her you wouldnt leave her
    your all she has left
    as you walk out the door
    she colapses to the ground
    unable to stop the tears anylonger
    youve left and she's lost her reasion to live
    she grabs the blade
    slowly pressing it against her wrist
    watching as the blood poors from
    her wrist into a pool on the ground
    as she sits there slowly fadeing away
    not afraid of the death that awaits her
    she wishes that you would
    come back and save her
    praying that you would realize
    that you were her world
    as her world goes black
    and her body goes cold
    she can hear you crying
    adn telling her your sorry
    she can fell you holding her
    as you try and stop the bleading
    her vision slowly comes back
    as her body grows warmer
    "I couldnt leave you, I love you too much"
    you told her as you kissed her forhead
    "I cant live without you, I wont leave you"
    you said cluching her in your arms
    she is your world but you couldnt see it till you pictured your life without her in it
    you are her world as she is yours
    so never let her go
    for a life without her is a life without meaning

    Submitted on 2007-08-26 17:51:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is an amazing piece. it truly conveys the love between these two people... this is not a feeling very many people find in their lives. this is real love. you set it up perfectly and i love that what she thinks is her last thought is that she wishes he would come back and save her and then it ends up happening. Usually i'm not a fan of faerie-tale endings but you ended this one perfectly... keep writing you have an extremely precious gift for conveying feeling in your poetry.

    | Posted on 2007-08-26 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]

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