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Come Away With Me

Author: Magnolia Steele
ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
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Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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An older poem of mine. Written at the end of last year or beginning of this one. Enjoy!

Come Away With Me

Come away with me...

And skip rocks
along the rings of Saturn.
Wish upon a star
that shoots like an arrow
from Athena's bow
waging a war against the night.

Hop Scotch on the planets,
chalking out our space in the universe.

Straddle a comet
that streaks through a sapphire sky,
as we try to pin it's tail somewhere
on the skirts of the milkyway.

Come away with me...

Trail the edges of eternity,
leave footsteps in the sands of time.

Submitted on 2007-08-26 17:58:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow! is the only word for this one- I agree. This is another beautiful piece by you. It has the qualities that I have aspired to and attempted in a couple of my own. Thank you for sharing this one...stormy
| Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! This is simply amazing and I long to go on this journey now. I also wish and long to write poetry like this. I am a poet, but I think I need work.

| Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]
  where the heck have you been? I haven't been around either, but can I put this poem in unfettered verse? it's just lovely. hope things are going well for you.
| Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
I Believe I remember reading this write of yours before
It is just as Beautiful now as I first remember it
I am really Happy to see you Posting again
I really Missed You
I Hope and Pray You and Your Family are doing well
God Bless
Your Friend
| Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Where or where can I purchase my ticket for this wonderful journey of which you speak? My but you have weaved a colorful invitation to leave this cold and mundane world and chase those things which are considered unattainable.
| Posted on 2007-08-26 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

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