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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 545
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 929



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       i dont want to talk about it. i just want to cry. i hate myself.


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    i dont like the way you treat me
    i dont like the way you beat me
    i dont understand this pain
    or why i feel this way
    just make it go away
    i cant stay -with you

    you make my world blue
    i cant be true to you
    i dont know what to do
    but im so through with you

    we haven't even been together that long
    but everything about you is wrong
    in my world, you dont belong
    im not that strong

    you wasted two weeks of my time
    and somehow in those days you made of blind

    i listen to you apologize
    but you cant dry my eyes
    not after you're the one who made me cry
    by raping me and stealing what was mine

    i wont forgive your lies
    not after you tore open my thighs
    not after you forced me from behind
    not after you made my world die




    Submitted on 2007-08-27 05:05:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Girl I think you do need to kick this person to the curb - especially if there is physical altercations!

    You deserve to be happy but you have to stop surrounding yourself with people who bring you down.

    I send you love,peace,joy&smiles to share & some special ones just for you

    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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