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    dots Submission Name: She Is Everything Im Notdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 576
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 685



    Description:
       i spend most of my time judging myself
    noticing how much better everyone else is
    thats what this poem is about
    it can be improved i just wrote it as it came to mind


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    dotsShe Is Everything Im Notdots
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    she has it all
    everything i want
    everything i wish to be
    confidence, beauty, style, passion
    living the life, living her dreams
    i sit back and watch
    like a movie on a screen
    the more i watch the more it hurts
    she is everything im not
    everything i will never be
    he saw that and soon dumped me
    tears in my eyes lies in my heart
    the truth is well hidden
    ive lied from the start
    your perfect in every single way
    everything i want to be
    theres nothing left to say
    one day ill be perfect
    maybe you will notice me
    maybe just maybe
    one day it will be me




    Submitted on 2007-08-27 08:52:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is so sad, i know exactly how you feel i have had many guys pass me up for some girl who was perfect. trust me when i say these guys are not worthy of you because no one is perfect and if they want you to be someone your not then they don't want you. keep up the good work. Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really sad poem, but I really like it. If a guy has dumped you for a "perfect" girl (I'd be surprised if she really would be), then he's not worth it. I prefer girls who aren't perfect. keep up the good work
    Ed
    | Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by Lord Bane | [ Reply to This ]


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