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    dots Submission Name: Just A Linedots

    Author: kissmystars
    ASL Info:    20/F/NY
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 4/5/7
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 937
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 762


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    dotsJust A Linedots

    I left a place no longer mine
    to find a thing I never knew.
    At times the truth is just a line.

    Tired of a life now begnin
    I yearned for a brighter hue.
    I left a place no longer mine.

    I traveled to my place of fine
    and saw a shade of hopeful new.
    At times the truth is just a line.

    The road led me to a sign,
    a truth revealed to a small few.
    I left a place no longer mine.

    Finally, it came to me at nine,
    I realized as if on cue.
    At times the truth is just a line.

    The space I need is now entwin'd
    with the gentle kiss of you.
    I left a place no longer mine,
    at times the truth is just a line.

    Submitted on 2007-08-27 23:53:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very nice, i wish i couls say more but i am unsure of how to critique this

    you did a lovey job

    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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