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    dots Submission Name: Something About The Moondots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    25/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 1181/894/219
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSomething About The Moondots
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    There was something about the moon
    And the way it lit your face
    I could not resist myself
    I had to have a taste.

    There was something in the air
    That somehow made us come together
    And though it may never happen again
    It's a moment we'll have forever

    There was something in your eyes
    That set my soul on fire
    A reflection of my lust
    That hidden, dark desire

    There was something in your voice
    That caressed me deep inside
    An extension of your hands
    It gave me butterflies

    There was something about the moon
    And there was nothing I could do
    The passion broke my boundaries
    And I lost myself in you




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      I saw the title and was compelled to read. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece. Very nicely written - an easy read with the right amount of passion without sounding sappy.
    Well written
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      I certainly love the buildup continaed in this price about how many things brought about the rising passion within you. If you like the moon you just might like my piece called "He Shone on You".
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice. not just another sappy old love poem. I like the moon too. nice work.
    | Posted on 2007-08-28 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      A wonderful poem...superb meter and excellent scansion! As I've said before, you do have the knack for poetry...you DO understand it... excellent ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-08-28 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is beautifully written, very passionate seeming to me.

    "There was something about the moon
    And the way it lit your face
    I could not resist myself
    I had to have a taste."
    i like this a lot, the I had to have a taste makes me think of lips slightly parted and sweet flutters of breath against my face

    "There was something in the air
    That somehow made us come together
    And though it may never happen again
    It's a moment we'll have forever"
    bittersweet, it makes me feel all longing and heartachy

    "There was something in your eyes
    That set my soul on fire
    A reflection of my lust
    That hidden, dark desire"
    dark, passionate lust, hot and fast and a long awaited consumation?

    "There was something in your voice
    That caressed me deep inside
    An extension of your hands
    It gave me butterflies"
    emotional equivalent to jean-cleades voice....oh i deliciously shivery it sounds when someone like that is capable making words sound like sex and chocolate

    "There was something about the moon
    And there was nothing I could do
    The passion broke my boundaries
    And I lost myself in you"
    a perfect ending
    bravo, encore

    a lovely piece, less melancholy than usual and i appreciate that a lot

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-08-28 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]



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