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    dots Submission Name: Love is an inferno, baby!dots

    Author: Ratiomeducet
    ASL Info:    27/M/Austin, TX
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 104/147/44
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I look for the fire.
    I coat my hair with flamables
    and dress myself in gasoline

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    dotsLove is an inferno, baby!dots

    Sitting statue statured,
    Seething. Searing.
    Sculpted still in pose.
    I burn.

    The skin does melt
    from my steady muscles,
    My lips do fall
    from grinning teeth,
    and the blood does boil.

    Mine is a fire built of desire, lit with a kiss,
    it burns me morning, noon, and night.

    But love is as strange as the flame it produces,
    it can be an inferno
    that engulfs you wholely when it's ignited,
    it can be a dying ember
    that blows you off when it's burnt you out.

    But oh the fire..
    The fire.
    The fire..
    Oh how the fire stirs my soul.

    And once your lit you long to burn forever more.

    Submitted on 2007-08-28 19:09:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The whole passion fire connection is a very common achetype but this is done alright inspite of it. I usually love internal rhyme but the rhyme of fire and desire to me seemd tired and overdone. I can't knock you for using it because I know I too have used it. Wonderful title anyway putting the baby at the end broke my somber expression into a laugh, thank you for that. peace
    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      Now this I like. I like how you liken love to a burning fire and you go that extra mile to connect the two.
    I am not one for nit picking so I will leave that for someone else. At first I had to think about it until the third stanza. I find that It is indeed liken to a fire and that it does engulf the mind, body and soul.

    Nicely done


    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]

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