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    dots Submission Name: Get Pisseddots
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    Author: jonny b
    ASL Info:    23mwa
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 15/35/28
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
    Total Views: 707
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1397



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    dotsGet Pisseddots
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    Donít tread on me
    Let me not be deceived
    Donít threaten me
    Let me have my peace
    All we want is freedom
    A quiet existence
    To worship my god
    In relaxed contentment
    Instead I'm confronted
    With an undeniable truth
    That our government pawns
    Have ripped out our roots
    Iíd rather rot in prison
    Free in my heart
    Than support tyranny
    Cowered in dark
    A banking system
    Aimed at slavery
    The people in charge
    Have betrayed me
    You may not have money
    You may not have pour
    But banded together
    We can devour
    An entire system
    Raised against us
    If we donít defend our selves
    Who will defend us?
    I'm sorry the facts
    Are so disturbing
    I my self find them unnerving
    But with out a struggle
    With out a fight
    We leave our people
    Out to die
    We can make a change
    Push forward an existence
    But we fight hard
    And be relentless
    Forget the b.s.
    The 9-5
    Its time to fight
    Evolve or die
    For get it for now
    Dream of better
    When we peruse our existence
    Un-corrupted, un-fettered
    So pray for me friends
    And ill pray for you
    Together we can win
    And stop this abuse




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    ||| Comments |||
      Very rousing read...makes me want to stand up and yell, "Hell no...we won't go!"

    But not that exactly...you get my drift.

    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. It was a very strong read for me. You sound like you know what your doing when you write.
    "...Let me have my peace
    All we want is freedom..."
    I really like these lines because they stand out. It's saying like your trying to get away from a darkness that you can't get out of. But, this read is very great, and I'll recommend this to people.
    Fave's addition!
    AnGeL
    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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