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    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 646
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 396



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       i started this when i was depressed, then i got in a good mood so ill work on it next time im depressed


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    Looked outside last night hoping to see a scarlet moon
    But it was playing hide-and-go-seek in the clouds
    Closed the blinds and turned away
    And I realized that much to my dismay
    The fear I keep hidden has once again come through

    And the higher my hopes seem to climb
    The more they'll hurt falling every time...







    Submitted on 2007-08-28 20:44:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this has great potential, i can't wait to read the finished version!!

    But it was playing hide-and-go-seek in the clouds
    Closed the blinds and turned away

    these lines give great imagery
    | Posted on 2007-08-28 00:00:00 | by I_m not Broken | [ Reply to This ]


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