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    dots Submission Name: Tireddots
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    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsTireddots
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    I've been weak for to long now

    Sit down and ask myself how?

    When did i get here...

    My mask is beginning to tear away

    All my defenses are worn thin

    If you really take a look at me

    Each fear is now a reality

    As time ticks by I don't know who to be

    Streets are just watching as I Fall

    Desperately reaching for a hand

    Yet each one pulls away in fear

    If you lived this life of mine

    You may break down and cry

    I know theres things I could of done better

    Just though I was being so clever

    I'm just thankful I didn't end up in a coffin

    So tired of feeling like the enemy

    As time ticks by I just don't know who to be





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