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    dots Submission Name: Mortal Life....dots

    Author: forfila
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    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsMortal Life....dots

    I am not afraid of death,
    But I'm all alone,
    This mind of mine is the mediator of my existence,
    This life and my death; A sentencing to this flesh imprisonment,

    I am still whole,
    Though I will grow old, My humanity will always illustrate traits seen as shades of my soul,

    Though my mind still feels the anger and I know pain as if it we're pure,
    My heart still remains obscure; in a silent misery I'm sitting here viewing myself doing the lords witnessing,

    Only fulfilling my missions concerns,
    As I'm watching like a third person; I'm caught inside fiery depths, twisted perspectives and points of view of reality on earth.
    Is it too late to save earth?
    Thats now my major concern,

    So Lord, as the clock turns I am turning back to you for your word,
    Lord, Please guide me in this mortal life as a soldier of Christ,
    Let me lead with your light into this dusk then on through the night.

    Let our realm established here on earth ignite,
    We will fight for love, With Fire for sacrifices and we will fight till the time you have decided.

    I am strong,
    I am alive,
    This time is mine; and lord, Whatever is mine is yours,
    We're are feeding off your thoughts and starting your war.

    I fear it's nearly time,
    The devil is nearly alive,
    But this time; once and for all its time for final goodbyes.

    Submitted on 2007-08-29 11:11:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Deep words, a prayer brimming with very realistic anguish...

    "This mind of mine is the mediator of my existence"

    So true,... amazing precision! Great choice of words, forfila, nearly perfect for the underlying theme ... this piece is written with both insight and vision. What a rare combination!!
    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminded me of a prayer a knight would recite before going into battle and it is filled with spiritual and living wonder.

    Very good!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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