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    dots Submission Name: “To Whom It May Concern: The anonymous letter”.dots
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    Author: Magger32
    ASL Info:    18-female-PA.
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 53/131/124
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1122
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    Description:
       Liking someone but not being able to tell them.


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    dots“To Whom It May Concern: The anonymous letter”.dots
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    Darkened by the dimness of light,
    My feelings for you are hidden in the shadows of night.
    I walk besides you, but never truly hand in hand.
    I wish for what it is worth that I could make you understand.
    I’m not in love,
    I’m definitely scared to care.
    But even through your toughest times, I would always be there.

    I’ve watched your smile brighten up my days.
    I’ve looked in your eyes and been amazed.
    You’re a person I could honor, cherish and love.
    But maybe, just maybe that could never be enough.




    Submitted on 2007-08-29 15:44:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is very sweet.

    I like the imagery...beside you, but never truly hand in hand...smile brighten up my days...

    Very pretty pictures...the things you think about when you think about that someone that you're smitten with.

    I think this is fabulous!

    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it... i like it alot.. its very cute and the kinda poem that makes u go... "awww"

    that last line would have to be my favourite..

    "But maybe, just maybe that could never be enough."

    ^.^ i added it to my favourites.

    but one thing aye.. wen u say im not in love thats because u just like the person isnt it? its not like urr in luv but ur almost there... im thinking.. i dont know:S:S

    one other thing...

    "I’ve look into your eyes "

    look should be looked....


    just grammar thingy ^.^

    MDP
    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]


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