Of all your poems, I think this one is my favourite. The theme and title was very nice and emotive. The only thing I don't love about it is the step towards aggression at the end. Since the stanza before that was about letting the anger die with time the aggression comes at a time. Perhaps it is supposed to be interpreted as you pitying him, I dunno. If that is the case, it would be really cool if you could write a piece like this starting with anger and ending in pity, because that is often how the emotions go. Keep up the excellent work. I am adding this to my favorites and I'll try to put a tune to it ^_^ / Nils
I think there's a deep hidden feeling in this, one you weren't trying to put out in writing, but kept more for yourself, and you needed just a small way to let some of it go without spilling yourself. I liked it.
Kera.. she said she meant it not to have feeling. Hmm.. Anyways You piece has a good flow.. and I think it is good that it is lacking in feeling because the person you wrote this for doesn't seem to deserve any more of your feelings. Good job
The reality is I wrote for considerable length about this and was logged out by the system and lost it. I think it is the response Jamii wanted to hear from all of this, but who knows, maybe she wants silence. But the abridged version: I already said goodbye, I've lost your screenname, and have no intention of communicating with you again. Unfortunately, this begs response.
The truth does set me free, and when you realize it you'll be free too.
I know part of you wanted me to fight to keep you, and that is one reason your angry.
I didn't lie about anything in all that time, despite how often you weaved your webs.
I'm not a coward, if I was I wouldn't have covered all those miles on foot just to talk to you, take the abuse you gave me, or be around a guy with a restraining order against him. I came there because I would not be told to shut up by a bully.
And if I was shaking it was because I was seeing you so messed up in your own mind, and I always hope for better.
Sorry this has no length to it, I lost my better reply, oh well, it woulda just convinced you to keep up this pestering of me, or this audience to doubt you, and since its yours its better they are on your side. Though I'll remind them there are always two, and I'm a different villain than the sort they may think.
I won't contact you, in case you missed it I made my goodbye already. If you contact me, I'll listen, but I doubt I will respond if its simply more rage.