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    dots Submission Name: why?dots
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    Author: MyHeart2Yours
    ASL Info:    18.female.Pennsylavnia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 96/112/42
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 1886
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 417



    Description:
       go eff a duck...honestly...I'm in a crappy mood.


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    dotswhy?dots
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    When will you realize,
    that sorrys aren't enough?
    I'm sitting here trying not to cry,
    I need to act tough,
    but you'll never care,
    cause you don't know me,
    you know nothing about me,
    except what you see on the outside,
    fake smiles,
    fake laughs,
    fake is what I am,
    cause I'm nothing more then a friend,
    to you




    Submitted on 2004-06-20 20:56:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Can I ever relate to this. I felt I could really relate to how you felt, like you brought all my emotions back out. Try going fiurther with this piece maybe, you could get mroe expression out:O)
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty good i think you coulda kept going also u kinda juss stopped kinda abroptly other then that is was hot nyce work ,i'm No Talent check out my work sometime
    | Posted on 2004-06-20 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      Good emotions in this piece.. I can really feel your anger... The flow in this piece is pretty good.. but I agree with No Talent.. maybe think about expanding it some. Nice write though
    | Posted on 2004-06-20 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]


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