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    dots Submission Name: Queefeddots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    24/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 617/549/200
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 173
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2109



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       Discaimer: I've already been ripped one new asshole, and will probabily get another new one to shyt out of by the end of the day. This is based on actual events!


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    dotsQueefeddots
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    A turned down the lights
    and turned the music on
    gave her the look
    as to say "it's on"
    she spread her thighs
    looked me in the eyes
    take me on
    "a magic carpet ride"

    but than she
    Queefed
    (Queefed!)
    under the sheets
    than looked down
    asked what's wrong with me
    after she
    Queefed
    (Queefed!)
    under the sheets
    come on baby
    you should be happy
    come on be happy I'm
    so relaxed
    after all, it's just
    a little gas
    but she
    Queefed
    (Queefed)
    under the sheets
    than wondered what
    was wrong with ME!?!

    It's been a few years
    and I've moved on
    but the other day
    she asked me to write a song
    about our sorrows and wows
    and in my head
    this is how it goes

    after she
    Queefed
    (Queefed!)
    under the sheets
    come on baby
    you should be happy
    come on be happy I'm
    so relaxed
    after all, it's just
    a little gas
    but she
    Queefed
    (Queefed)
    under the sheets
    than wondered what
    was wrong with ME!?!

    Well every now and than
    her friend might ask
    wasn't that
    a great piece of ass
    tell me is she really
    worth my time
    and I tell them just
    what I have in mind

    that she
    Queefed
    (Queefed!)
    under the sheets
    than looked down
    asked what's wrong with me
    after she
    Queefed
    (Queefed!)
    under the sheets
    come on baby
    you should be happy
    come on be happy I'm
    so relaxed
    after all, it's just
    a little gas
    but she
    Queefed
    (Queefed)
    under the sheets
    than wondered what
    was wrong with ME!?!
    I said She Queefed
    (queefed!)






    Submitted on 2007-08-30 10:46:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      funny as hellz. good lyrics.
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...oh my god.

    I am horrified by this poem. And strangely intrigued. And horrified some more.

    I don't know what to say...it is very well written, but the subject matter...

    geez...I'm torn between laughter and disgust. If that was the reaction you were looking for, you got it.

    This is insane.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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