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    dots Submission Name: My own witnessdots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 667
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    Bytes: 803



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    dotsMy own witnessdots
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    A dream
    That began as any other dream would , for me
    A white clearing , empty and blank
    Normally I'd fill it in by now
    But I didn't
    Instead I started walking straight
    In the distance I saw a tree
    I walked up to it , stared at the body suspended by a wire
    And it was me
    My mutilated corpse , arms chopped up , legs pierced by iron shells , but head perfectly intact
    And I sat down to think , pull out a book and started drawing it
    Every hole , every cut , everything
    And I smiled during it
    Then I got up , cried , alot until the world flooded
    And after that , I look at this scene
    I seen two of me die , And I stared down at my bare feet
    And realized
    I'm finally insane




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      yes, yes, yes I at least think I get the hidden meaning here (That would be due to the excellent title) This misk writing tells a great story and I like the way you capped it off in a lighter note, again at least it felt that way to me, Nice work dude,

    ~Matt.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...i love it. i could totally see your mangled corpse. it was deliciously repulsive. you made my blood run cold. and for the record, i dont think you're mad...i think you're brilliant...keep it up.

    cheers.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]


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