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    dots Submission Name: Just For Herdots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsJust For Herdots

    She hides behind,
    Her shaded eyes.
    Hoping no one hears,
    Her faded cries,
    She dries her eyes,
    Holding back the tears,
    So no one sees,
    Her regret, she’s,
    Fretting in secret,
    Default, a mode of preset,
    With eyes that seep and leak wet,
    And it’s too familiar to her,
    Just like me,
    I feel I tend to prefer,
    The same secrecy,
    So I can dry my eyes,
    All the while,
    Holding back the tears,
    Choking, hoping,
    All the time,
    No one ever hears…

    Submitted on 2007-08-30 12:45:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the format was good; I really liked the rhyme scheme, though I had to read it a second time to get it. I also liked the way you potrayed the emotion and the end, how you related to yourself. As always, great job!
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      Good write. It is short and heart felt.
    | Posted on 2007-08-31 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      it's a cool poem.i like it,you're giving the reader one of your secrets....you don't have bleed everything out.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by mmray | [ Reply to This ]
      To be honest, which i think comments are meant for, I think you are only scratching the surface of the world that is poetry. You can really elaborate on these feelings, or ones more personal. That would make a great poem. But i think the format is interesting. Evokes the emotion I think you were trying to achieve. I raise my glass to you.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by taylorannxx | [ Reply to This ]
      It was pretty good. I liked the emotion described. The only thing that I didn't like was the format. That's just my personal opinion. Good one.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Logic | [ Reply to This ]
      it's a good poem with a heart felt words
    I like it ...it's nice simple words ..I like it
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by muhammed | [ Reply to This ]
      not too shabby...i think everyone has moments when they feel no one is listening...but the sun will come out tomorrow according to annie. and who can argue with her? anywho, your poem was quite nice although it lacked a little something. however, it is your poem and you dont have to listen to me.

    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]

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