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    dots Submission Name: Essence of HEartdots

    Author: NoLoveForMe
    Elite Ratio:    5.79 - 1/1/3
    Words: 311
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Another draft. But it still seems.. epmty

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    dotsEssence of HEartdots

    The life within each of us is alive and kicking,
    Yet yours is even more.
    The hearts within each of us is beating well,
    But yours is stronger.
    I go along life day by day,
    hoping that something will swing my way,
    As I wade through the self-wrought waters of solitude;
    Yet you are paving your own way,
    Making your own life.
    No amount of money I could ever accumulate
    Could ever match your conviction for life.

    I stand with you,
    In awe of what God has created,
    While in grief
    Over what I can never have.
    I watch you tackle every aspect of life,
    And hoping it turns out for the best,
    While wishing for the end of my own.
    I see you from a distance,
    And consider about our friendship,
    Wondering what good I have done,
    To know such a man as you.
    A man of heart,
    A man of mind,
    A man in body,
    aAnd in soul.
    Your manners are impeccable,
    Yet you don't hold back anything
    That is on your mind.
    You open doors, hold bags, and pay for food,
    Yet you don'ot treat ladies as fragile damsels,
    Rather as women of the world,
    Who are to be treated well.

    I think I love you,
    In fact,
    I know I do.
    So the day you finally find that woman,
    The one you deserve,
    I will be right there, and help you through Every swerve of the relationship.
    I help you when you stumble,
    And to find the right way to say "I do."
    EVen if it doesn't end up being me with you,
    As long as you're happy,
    Then I'm happy for you.

    Until it is tine to relinquish my love,
    I continue to cry
    And sit here everyday,
    Hoping the Lord will ease my pains,
    And slowly take my life away.

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