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    dots Submission Name: Like Second Chances Like Fairytalesdots

    Author: screamALEX
    ASL Info:    19/M/PA
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 40/93/49
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLike Second Chances Like Fairytalesdots

    Like Second Chances, Like Fairytales

    All these dreams in the corner,
    waiting to come true,
    all these dreams sitting here,
    still waiting for you.

    Take my hand,
    and Iíll lead the way,
    just give me a chance,
    to take you away.
    A place where,
    your dreams wonít get you anywhere,
    a place that has no air,
    and since breathing has become such a chore,
    you wonít be needing it anymore.

    Itís a little darker here,
    but what do you care,
    youíre so oblivious to everything around you,
    ití no wonder youíre here.
    I hate to break it to you,
    but you canít kill yourself,
    and expect to keep living as well.
    Thereís something about you,
    that I canít quite place,
    I think itís the hint of love,
    behind all that hate.

    Hearing all this,
    must kill you inside,
    but I promiseÖ
    all of this pain will heal with time.
    And the scar will be but a memento left,
    never allowing your mind to forget,
    all that youíve done,
    and all that you are,
    sweetie thatís what scars are for.

    So the next time youíre standing there,
    razor in hand,
    just think about these words Iíve said,
    and perhaps let the tears fall instead,
    trust meÖ
    red eyes are better than death.
    Cause in the endÖ
    what could possibly be worse than death?

    If you ever need me again,
    just call my name,
    take my hand,
    and Iíll lead the way,
    just give me a chance,
    to take you away.

    Submitted on 2007-08-30 19:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      very pretty...very positive...

    I agree with blu on the saving life as opposed to taking it thing...

    This has some lovely lines in it...

    I think you did an overall fabulous job!
    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this
    it makes me so happy to read things where people are celebrating, or at least saving, life instead of taking it

    you have a wonderful perspective, a great freshness and livlihood that we could all use
    just work on your form and maybe rhyme if you choose to stay with that syle
    and i think you will do splendidly

    | Posted on 2007-08-31 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a refreshing perspective to read. I can relate to the perspective too, so bonus points. It's a tough and touchy thing to accomplish but you've done quite well with this subject.

    Over all, good job. Hope to see some more!
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]

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