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Passion Intrigued

Author: Chicool2
ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266 /260 /60
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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just something i thought up

Passion Intrigued

It's just a brief moment.
When his arm
Brushes against mine.
Yet he doesn't pull back.
That moment
Seemed to ignite
A whispering flame.
Ready to evolve Into Fire.
His skin against mine
Turns to longer moments.
A hand to hold
Changed to brushed lips.
And that brief moment
Becomes a lingering moment.
When passion intrigued
Turns to blue flame

Submitted on 2007-08-30 20:54:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The innocense of young love awakening is spoken of in the lines of this piece. It takes me back so many years to the tender days of my own existence.
| Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this...tis simple and sweet and gives a little story for the mind to imagine on. I hues and hope we have all had moments like this.


| Posted on 2007-09-01 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]

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