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    dots Submission Name: Passion Intrigueddots
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    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 778
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    Bytes: 477



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       just something i thought up


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    dotsPassion Intrigueddots
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    It's just a brief moment.
    When his arm
    Brushes against mine.
    Yet he doesn't pull back.
    That moment
    Seemed to ignite
    A whispering flame.
    Ready to evolve Into Fire.
    His skin against mine
    Turns to longer moments.
    A hand to hold
    Changed to brushed lips.
    And that brief moment
    Becomes a lingering moment.
    When passion intrigued
    Turns to blue flame
    Everlasting.




    Submitted on 2007-08-30 20:54:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The innocense of young love awakening is spoken of in the lines of this piece. It takes me back so many years to the tender days of my own existence.
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this...tis simple and sweet and gives a little story for the mind to imagine on. I hues and hope we have all had moments like this.

    Enjoyed

    Kate
    | Posted on 2007-09-01 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]


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