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    dots Submission Name: its my enddots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       ive had enough of being controled
    weather is by my heart who loves someone who doesnt care or my mind telling me these so called friends will be there
    im taking the easy way out



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    dotsits my enddots
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    sick of it all
    sick of the fight
    my fate is sealed
    its the end of my life
    no more mind games
    no more control
    im ending it tonight
    with a knife to my throat
    sent my appologies
    said my good bye's
    now is the time
    to take my flight
    with a broken heart
    and a twisted mind
    the only think i want
    is a peaceful suicide
    ill end your pain
    ill end your fight
    ill say good-bye
    in this dark and quiet night




    Submitted on 2007-08-31 09:28:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i totaly understand your message here once again. it's so sad when you want to give up on life because your convinced it's the easy way out and it will be less pain full to everyone if you are no longer here. i have felt this many of times and recently i have felt it again because i have hurt someone dear to me unitentially but i also know it will make it all worse. so as much as i'm sure you hate heraring it you just got to push through the day one at a time and know you are loved by someone. i hope it all get's better for you. i love your writings, keep up the good ework. Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-09-01 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful poem in the sense that its full of raw emotion. I can feel that you didn't censor yourself, as many people do in poems such as this one. I find that many people write poetry with a similar message: "I want to die", but they mask the real emotion with gory, bloody images and, essentially, scare tactics. Because you're so open and frank about your intentions in this piece, I think it's one of the most beautiful ones I've read.
    However, it worries me. A girl as beautiful as yourself, who clearly has to much potential to write, really shouldn't have to feel this way. As someone who's on the other side of all of these feelings, I urge you to find some sort of help, and try to work through everything that's hurting you. Once you get past the pain, you will have so much fun in your life that you will be glad you didn't end it. Best wishes,
    Shannon
    | Posted on 2007-09-01 00:00:00 | by try_again | [ Reply to This ]


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