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    dots Submission Name: Midnight Skydots

    Author: JAcksonJr
    ASL Info:    20/Male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 56/116/57
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMidnight Skydots

    he walks to the counter
    and asks,
    "if the tide ebbs
    and departs
    then returns
    to familiar shores
    if the moon recedes
    behind a blanket of clouds
    but illuminates the sky
    after the clouds move by
    well then
    what happens to our soul
    after life ebbs, recedes
    and departs?
    do we return to a familiar world
    or are we lost in the shadows
    never to return?"
    the girl was flabbergasted
    and unsure of what to say
    with a quizzical smile
    she answered
    "well, i'm not so sure
    about life and the world
    but i like to believe
    that after we die
    we become those clouds in the sky
    or that oceans ebbing tide
    so, you ask me if we return
    well, yes, i believe we do.
    that'll be fifty cents for the paper,
    thank you."
    the man, satisfied with her reply,
    paid the fifty cents and walked
    out of the store
    she never saw him again
    but now she always watches
    for the changes in life
    as she awaits her return
    to the midnight sky

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    | Posted on 2007-11-07 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
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