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Midnight Sky

Author: JAcksonJr
ASL Info:    20/Male/NY
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 56 /116 /57
Words: 190
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Midnight Sky

he walks to the counter
and asks,
"if the tide ebbs
and departs
then returns
to familiar shores
if the moon recedes
behind a blanket of clouds
but illuminates the sky
after the clouds move by
well then
what happens to our soul
after life ebbs, recedes
and departs?
do we return to a familiar world
or are we lost in the shadows
never to return?"
the girl was flabbergasted
and unsure of what to say
with a quizzical smile
she answered
"well, i'm not so sure
about life and the world
but i like to believe
that after we die
we become those clouds in the sky
or that oceans ebbing tide
so, you ask me if we return
well, yes, i believe we do.
that'll be fifty cents for the paper,
thank you."
the man, satisfied with her reply,
paid the fifty cents and walked
out of the store
she never saw him again
but now she always watches
for the changes in life
as she awaits her return
to the midnight sky
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| Posted on 2007-11-07 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
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