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The Never Played Symphonies


Author: the_truth
ASL Info:    15/f/usa
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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A dedication for my friend ‘previously-recorded’ s Uchihacest fanfiction ‘The Never Played Symphonies’


The Never Played Symphonies





The Never Played Symphonies


A touch that was tainted
This relationship that was damned
The first time my reaction was fainted
As you took my body and it was slammed

A stone so heated - so red
A past that was loving and pure
Marble cold onyx eyes that match the dead
A hatred that you must endure

I was on a mission to end you
Now I am screaming you name
After all I have been through
I am lost in your twisted game

Never sorry for your feel
One for your domination
The pleasure that I must conceal
All this building my frustration

If you knew what I needed
You would never do such
For you to stop - I pleaded
Begged as my hold on your cloak clutched

I tossed my head and you went on
Moving with the beat of your command
To your skill and form I am drawn
Being beneath you like such was not planned

Training and learning to fight
To get the attention I so craved
The sweat and pain was a new height
My body you enslaved

I shall grown and learn
But nothing will end we
Hurting you will never be my turn
And this you will agree

A succulent fruit you taunt
The taste of it on my lips craving
Sweet flavor from your body I want
You thought that your visit was saving

A white sheet that told all
Knowing that I had no say in it
As you had your way with me on that stone wall
Soon after you got my submit

A mark that should have been made by my lips
Denying any emotional regard
The shadow of betrayal lost in an eclipse
Excepting such is more that impossible and hard

An envy and want as I want the others move
Actions that I wish would be mimicked on I
Something that will answer my question - prove
Though such an emotion I must deny

An elder I looked up to
Such to you was defiance
If you wanted to injure, you would not get my compliance
It is not as though he could take the place of you

Fighting another for your approval
Turned out to be nothing more than dismay
It was nothing just more of your removal
The only thing that changed was the thoughts of they

Catching others in the actions I so required
Hearing words of something pure
I said to you what they did and it inspired
It won’t last that I’m sure

Nothing much more than inactivity
Dealings to pass the occasion
Some how this hit your ‘sensitivity’
There is never any persuasion

Sent to be touched by one whom was not you
In silent horror I was forced to see
Enough to subdue
Killed by someone who couldn’t be me

Excepted for the monster than I’ve become
A single ring to hold our bond
With the scolding sins I become numb
Never enough for you to respond

The decision to stay was not mine at all
Declining such an object - never
A home I can no longer recall
For you I wanted to be with forever

Capturing the one I called a friend
Needing to save him – but keep you
Knowing nothing – that you pretend
He was watching – this you knew

Making me relive my death
Through eyes that should not be mine
I could no longer catch my missing breath
With that you finally crossed the invisible line

A blade not meant for my love
Words and a touch never expected
No longer my black crow – now a white dove
My hope and fears you protected

Though as this time comes to a end
The sure hurt of being betrayed
I can no longer think what I wish and pretend
These symphonies have never been played



Authors note: I did this as a dedication for my friend ‘previously-recorded’ s Uchihacest fanfiction ‘The Never Played Symphonies’ I beta for her and I can easily say it is one of the best – if not the best – Uchihacest fanfics I have ever read. You should really check it out. She can be found on Fanfiction (dot) net and Adultfanfiction (dot) net.

If you review her fic let her know you read this poem.





Submitted on 2007-08-31 22:01:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really found this hard to read sorry. The meter was really disjointed and interrupted with the flow of the poem. The thing was I wanted to like it and was put off and made it to the middle and gave up.

My head went into "how can I make this readbale for me" mode. I felt there were too many words used that were unnecessary. for example excluding the following would make it more enjoyable for me.

A touch that was tainted
This relationship (that was) damned
(The) first time (my) reaction(s), (was) fainted
Body taken and slammed.

I really feel less is more here and it reads more effectively in my head.

These are just sggestions of one way ion which this poem could be improved and you may find others. Tap me up for a reread if you dare :)

Kate

| Posted on 2007-09-01 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]


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