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    dots Submission Name: Septemberdots
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    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 704
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    Description:
       I basically pulled this out of my thoughts, I know it's not my best.


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    dotsSeptemberdots
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    My memory is gloomy
    And I haven't been sane in weeks
    So I can't clearly remember
    The last time I truly cared

    I've lost all my former respect
    For both myself and my acquaintances
    All because the affairs I hated in the past
    Are somehow finding their way back

    Had hopes of a better tomorrow
    Thought I could tear my enmity to pieces
    And I could shed myself a new skin
    While never looking back

    Subconsciously I knew
    My expectations were impossible
    I knew I'd end up forlorn again
    But that's never stopped me before

    So on a cold day of September
    I sit here in solitude
    Thinking of all those wasted years
    That could have been memories




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      for such a young person your have amazing talent i hope though that you life is happier thne the writing i always like to think it is just creative minds at wokr keep writing dont stop ever i will read more the spelling was off just a bit true writers nature though ahhhaha mine is awfull
    | Posted on 2007-09-03 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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