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    dots Submission Name: Brother in Law's...well ex brother in lawdots
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    Author: art_flow
    ASL Info:    15 female
    Elite Ratio:    1.14 - 5/18/51
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    dotsBrother in Law's...well ex brother in lawdots
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    My Ex brother in law much like my sister lie's a lot...But I like him more...Not because I love him more.But because he's raising the boys...And I get along with him better.The most brotherly sisterly thing he ever told me was this...."What's wrong Ashley?"I was crying in the back seat because i just found out my sister was pregnant for the the second time and she was 18,and not married yet.....I said."I don't want Tracy to get hurt again...Not like Mark did to her."...And then I thought everything would be okay because he said."I wont leave her Ashley.I love her."
    He didn't hurt her.My sister hurt him...But their too much alike to be married.But I guess I shouldn't be mad at him.Because he kept his promice to me.He didn't leave her...She left him.When he went to Iraq...(something which I dont support...diffrent story)...She began to feel...lonely....And instead of talking to people...she "went" to people if you get what I mean...
    His famliy never liked my sister and they toled him,while he was in Iraq...Making it really hard for him over there....When he came home I made sure to tell him I wasn't mad at him...And even today my parents treat him worse then my sister...Which I understand,but I dont think is right...But when I seen him about one hour ago I told him I wasnt mad and I could see that he understood...But I feel still bad...




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