Description: this is for a guy at work, who's so brilliant that when he's not around, it breaks my heart.
For the boy who reads Kafka -------------------------------------------
Disappointment welles in my eyes
As I battle tears and rage against
The dying of our light.
The little girl on the plane,
As he turns his doll's head around
To look at me,
And as I wait impatiently for our next one-on-one
Meeting of the minds
I etch minute poetry
Onto the back of my own heart with charcoal.
His thoughts emerge in my dreams repeatedly,
And as I carefully measure out my afternoon coffee break,
I swear I hear the slurp of his mocha.
The tingle of his voice is inescapable
And staring at his vacant apron
Draped over his chair, accross from me
Makes my heart ache to the postponed
Rhythm of longing.
The best part is the vacant apron draped across the chair. That's where you have a really clear image, and it does the work of hundreds of words. The "slurp of his mocha" is a godd sound picture, too. "He's instantaneously the little girl on the plane..." is a tough one though. I'm not getting a clear picture there...if that's what you are going for.
Two word choices are a little questionable to me. You use the word RAGE in line 2, but that's not the overall feeling I am getting--- more like longing. And you use the word INCESSANTLY in line 16. To me that words connotes irritation and annoyance, but this guy is far from annoying.
I like "measure out my coffee break" the measuring helps bring to mind spooning up the sugar and creamer. Don't think you need so many adverbs and adjectives , though. I would drop impatiently, carefully, incessantly, and minute. I think it might make your ideas stronger if some of the verbs and nouns stand on their own. I think it has potential. Good luck with it.