Bring On The Pain

Author: Magnolia Steele ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2492 /1825 /232 Words: 132

Class/Type: Poetry /Dark Total Views: 1400 Average Vote:    4.0000 Bytes: 769

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Bring On The Pain

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Tap tap the needle tip, X marks the spot, punctured skin, watch the serum run- anywhere but here, screaming bloody murder. Invasion of the body, snatching the calm in the air like a vacuum Suck it in! Now the drip increases, are you aware... you over there! To numb to give a damn. Interjections of relief coat your lascivious system, preventing you to feel the cold hard truth, hissing like a snake that you can't see, but you know it is there ready to strike, but when? Self medicate your way out of a hole you dug in case you don't make it back out alive.

Submitted on 2007-09-02 02:01:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Wah. Psycho hate filled scheming monster! That was truly a dark poem, in fact, one of the darkest i've read here. It was inventive and creepy, I hope this is just a poem and not something you're actually feeling. If it is...you need serious help!! Other than that, I thought it was very cool.

| Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]

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