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Bring On The Pain


Author: Magnolia Steele
ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2492 /1825 /232
Words: 132
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
Total Views: 1400
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Bring On The Pain



Tap tap the needle tip,
X marks the spot,
punctured skin,
watch the serum run-
anywhere
but here, screaming
bloody murder.
Invasion of the body,
snatching the calm
in the air like a vacuum
Suck it in!
Now the drip increases,
are you aware...
you over there!
To numb to give a damn.
Interjections of relief
coat your lascivious system,
preventing you to feel
the cold hard truth,
hissing like a snake that
you can't see, but you know
it is there ready to strike, but when?
Self medicate your way
out of a hole you dug in case
you don't make it back out alive.




Submitted on 2007-09-02 02:01:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wah. Psycho hate filled scheming monster! That was truly a dark poem, in fact, one of the darkest i've read here. It was inventive and creepy, I hope this is just a poem and not something you're actually feeling. If it is...you need serious help!! Other than that, I thought it was very cool.
| Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]


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