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    dots Submission Name: Bring On The Paindots
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    Author: Magnolia Steele
    ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2492/1825/232
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 864
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 769



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    dotsBring On The Paindots
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    Tap tap the needle tip,
    X marks the spot,
    punctured skin,
    watch the serum run-
    anywhere
    but here, screaming
    bloody murder.
    Invasion of the body,
    snatching the calm
    in the air like a vacuum
    Suck it in!
    Now the drip increases,
    are you aware...
    you over there!
    To numb to give a damn.
    Interjections of relief
    coat your lascivious system,
    preventing you to feel
    the cold hard truth,
    hissing like a snake that
    you can't see, but you know
    it is there ready to strike, but when?
    Self medicate your way
    out of a hole you dug in case
    you don't make it back out alive.




    Submitted on 2007-09-02 02:01:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wah. Psycho hate filled scheming monster! That was truly a dark poem, in fact, one of the darkest i've read here. It was inventive and creepy, I hope this is just a poem and not something you're actually feeling. If it is...you need serious help!! Other than that, I thought it was very cool.
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]


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