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    Author: Magnolia Steele
    ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2492/1825/232
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 752
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is another new write as were the last five or so posted within these past few days. I'll be posting more new work and more active here ASAP.


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    dotsPhotographsdots
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    Stand still...
    watch as life pass you by
    in a flash-
    eyes closed, crazy grin,
    frozen in time.
    A moment locked
    behind the shutters
    avoiding the light...
    that fades a
    picture perfect sunny day,
    to black and white.
    Forever is traced by
    wrinkling fingers,
    holding so tight they
    clinch the spine,
    crippling memories,
    lurking quietly behind
    laminated curtains.




    Submitted on 2007-09-02 02:10:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I am starting to see a pattern in your writing. The three pieces I have read all seem to be speaking of someone who desperately wants to step out of self-imosed shadows and rejoin the world that has somehow pushed them into that same shadow. Step on out and embrace life, it is your birthright!!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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