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    dots Submission Name: Break Medots

    Author: Magnolia Steele
    ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2492/1825/232
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
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    dotsBreak Medots

    not wanting to crack
    under the pressure
    of unsure hands,
    eyes that puncture
    the facade that
    lay like skin over bones,
    she's transparent,
    like a pane of glass,
    reflecting images,
    imperceptible, she smiles,
    encouraging the
    vagueness of the moment
    hoping she won't
    shatter into a million bits,
    and feel once more.

    Submitted on 2007-09-02 02:37:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay, what I'm getting from this is a woman who is trying to hide in plain sight, fearing interaction lest it expose her weaknesses. Am I close?
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

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