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    dots Submission Name: The will that carries medots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    Description:
       About waking up in the wrong place, get it?
    the line "the wind carried me" is stolen from noir desir's "le vent nous portera".
    Thief.
    To and fro.
    hope somebody enjoys.


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    dotsThe will that carries medots
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    It was wednesday and walking the stairway would be easy again, or at least trying would be easy.
    The wind carried me.
    I got out of bed and ready for moving. Moving was one of the things i was quite keen at.
    And the wind keened, too.
    The poetry i once read, was now heard by other peoples ears and i was jealous. I hoped myself to be kind and polite. I knew i would be a bad actor. Someone who only wanted to be friends with you if your phone number is the same as a good books isbn. Someone worse than your last friend and you know it but you're just so desperate to give it a try.
    Someone completely insentinent.
    I would be that someone.
    I repeat: I would be that someone.
    My feet were missing the summers blue dunes.
    Cold and soft.
    Feel uncomfortable.
    Together.
    I felt uncomfortable and the landing steps were feeling the same way.
    Which direction is the night coming from?
    I will follow.
    The wind will blow me away.




    Submitted on 2007-09-02 09:23:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ooh I like this one, it gave me a feeling of disorientation and disappointment but also confusion. It's a very interesting piece of prose and i followed it alot better than the other one I read but...yenno? I haven't been on the computer in a month and my brain is frying... hahahahah Anywho... I liked this part


    "Someone who only wanted to be friends with you if your phone number is the same as a good books isbn."

    Haha Genius! It was lovely! Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]


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