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    dots Submission Name: The humanity that defined himdots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 849
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    Description:
       somehow i feel its conected with my prior piece "the will that carries me" so i titled it that name.
    never wrote such an obvious story, but i liked the idea about reaching out for the sky but still being left back. didnt look out for spelling errors, they're hiding.
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    dotsThe humanity that defined himdots
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    He had my hands reaching out for the sky till they final ripped off and flew towards the sky.
    the only thing left was him, and he had nothing more to reach out for my beloved heaven.
    He laughed for about 3 seconds, maybe four. because his feet were always reaching out for the earth, touching it, but still being unhappy,he jumped off a cliff.
    His feet were stuck in the earth and the only thing left was him and he had no more feet or hands left to walk and feel under his beloved sky and on his admired earth.
    that was about the time he realised he was human and he had no need to reach out for the sky or the earth. he had no need for religion.
    but the one thing that really made me human is the fact, that he realised something, when it was already to late.
    he died, and as always, though everyone knew he was insane and he had never been a good person, they only said the best things about him.
    the funeral was finished after 15 minutes and everyone went home and kept on reaching out for the sky.




    Submitted on 2007-09-02 15:00:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2010-01-17 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      >_< Not sure how to feel about it. It's very abstract and I suppose I might have read it very weirdly...especially with Lion king music in the back ground -_-;; it's hurting my brain... but Um... It was weird. Cool, but very strange. I'll read it again sometime, but it was very original and inventive. Keep at it!
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]


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