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    dots Submission Name: Secret Lovedots
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    Author: bubble_popper15
    ASL Info:    17, f, confused
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 201/127/45
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 176
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 602



    Description:
       I wrote this for a guy who loves me, but doesn't want anyone to know. Guys are weird like that.


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    dotsSecret Lovedots
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    We're madly in love, but you don't people to know
    Why must we keep things on the down low?
    Is it because of he witch that runs your life?
    She definately wouldn't want me to be your wife.
    I wish we could find a way to make this work
    If not, this relationship will drive me berzerk
    We've been together before and it worked out okay
    Right now, I'm just saying what I ought to say
    I love you, and I want everyone to see what I mean
    If this finally works for us, I will definately scream

    I love you!!!!!!




    Submitted on 2007-09-03 16:00:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      meh. The flow was a bit off, could be made a bit stronger, a bit deeper. Otherwise, good write. Boys are rather odd. Love should be allowed to bloom, no matter who sees it. Afterall, they arent the ones that have to suffer by hiding it. I dont think love should be hidden, regaurdless of the consequences. Let it out in the open! Be free! After all, you only TRULY love once in a lifetime! :)

    ->Dark Angel
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      Im sure many girls can relate to this one. Nicely written. I hope it all works out for you. Yes guys can be funny. Just make sure his intentions are good. :)
    | Posted on 2007-09-03 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]



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