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cacoon


Author: layDsayD
ASL Info:    29/f/florida
Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264 /243 /147
Words: 49
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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another repost you know the story didnt catch any attention the first time around thank all


cacoon



Hello lovey
You look well
Where were you ?
What game shall we play ?
Your butterfly sufficates
Twisted in sticky web
The pills go down easier
Still no dreams come
The words meld togeather
Smeared,like so many faces
Where have you been ?




Submitted on 2007-09-03 19:36:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it. Its like you're talking in metaphors. and it has tinge of passionate longing
| Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by sango_amaya | [ Reply to This ]
  I like that the poem sends a mixed message. but i'm kind of confused about the theme??
| Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by chini | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this. It seems like cut out scene from life of so many of us. One scene that speaks so much.
| Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]


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