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    dots Submission Name: cacoondots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 695
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       another repost you know the story didnt catch any attention the first time around thank all

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    Hello lovey
    You look well
    Where were you ?
    What game shall we play ?
    Your butterfly sufficates
    Twisted in sticky web
    The pills go down easier
    Still no dreams come
    The words meld togeather
    Smeared,like so many faces
    Where have you been ?

    Submitted on 2007-09-03 19:36:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. Its like you're talking in metaphors. and it has tinge of passionate longing
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by sango_amaya | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that the poem sends a mixed message. but i'm kind of confused about the theme??
    | Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by chini | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. It seems like cut out scene from life of so many of us. One scene that speaks so much.
    | Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]

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