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    dots Submission Name: Questioning your caredots
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    Author: MowsysWrath
    ASL Info:    15 Beastiality Bunghole
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 75/83/44
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 117
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1287



    Description:
       Depressing song, questioning Heather's care for her "favorite cousin."

    Really, it's for the band that I'm probably gonna be writing for if it becomes a band.


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    dotsQuestioning your caredots
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    If my life ended right now
    Would you shed a tear?
    If I needed to speak
    Would you be around to hear?

    Sometimes I get to thinking
    Sometimes I dare....

    It's funny how you tell me
    (I really care about you)
    But sometimes it all seems to be...
    (an illusion...)

    Sometimes I get to thinking
    Sometimes I dare
    To question how much you care
    And sometimes my mind will wander
    Sometimes I prove right...
    How much you care is never really in the light.

    If I hated myself right now
    Would you give a damn?
    I hate to say it but
    Your love feels like a scam

    I cant shake it
    These thoughts running through my mind
    I want it to go away
    But belief, I just can’t find….

    Sometimes I get to thinking
    And Sometimes I dare
    To Question how much you care
    And Sometimes my mind will wander
    Sometimes I prove right
    How much you care is NEVER in the light (never in the light) <<x2 echo

    I know you really love me
    And I’m sorry for what’s been said
    But sometimes I can’t stop thinking
    I’m so much better off dead.




    Submitted on 2007-09-03 23:14:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Mowsy
    Where the Heck did this come from??????????????
    This is an outstanding song that is so deep and heartfelt and to be Honest can easily reflect off my own life
    I dont think I saw any songs written by you before if I did they were nowhere near as good as this one is
    I would love to here this matched to music and layed down as a track
    You really impressed me with this one Mowsy
    I have said all along you have talent that is just waiting to come out
    Cant wait to read your next song
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch
    | Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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