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Author: huntingjonathon
ASL Info:    31/M/San Fran
Elite Ratio:    3 - 69 /117 /61
Words: 111
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Kisses between fools
of nations displeasured
by dreams
of dreams not made,
by street merchants raining
sunshine utopias
by only a few,

and they sue to save
the rest
before the masses construe
their displeasure with
promises forgot,
we all thought

our best interest
was at hand;

coin over coin,
of folly, dystopic folly,
building in the sand,
juxtaposed to sea
and to sand,

sand and to sea –
not seeing anything
before the monarchy that feeds

to fools.

-jonathon shank

Submitted on 2007-09-04 04:06:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  well written and thought out. I liked the feel and imagery of the piece, but must admit I'm don't completely understand why you broke the lines up like you did. That, of course, is purely aesthetic. very well done.
| Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  ah. An example of the corrupt government, have we? One in which they beg for funds for this or that to help all of humanity...Rich, greedy [censored]s that pocket whatever than can on and under the table. Good write, deep, rich and well said!

->Dark Angel
| Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
This Write I REALLY like
This is well thought out and there is so many meanings this write can have
That is the sign of a classic write
To me you are referring to people who beg and beg foe money to help others but in fact most of that money goes in their own pockets instead of going to help the people they falsely claim they want to Help
EXCELLENT JOB with this one Jonathon
You really got me thinking with this
God Bless

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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