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    dots Submission Name: Variations on the word Changedots
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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I happened upon this piece recently, although I wrote it many years ago I think it still holds true.

    -modeled after a similar poem by Margaret Atwood


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    dotsVariations on the word Changedots
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    This the word we use to stretch
    Vast awkward moments. Its perfect for those unwarranted
    Inescapable excuses for distress, for those wide circled two-
    Handed machines with look nothing
    Like what they truly represent. Add ages
    And you can market
    It. We can attach it to an old memory
    That we want to black out. There are whole
    Shelves filled with greeting cards holding not much on them
    but the word change, you can
    Trace it in pictures and you
    Can use it in old recipes too. How do we know
    Its not what challenges the snakes slithering on damp
    Trees in the middle of forests? As for the earthworms
    Which crawl in and out
    From underneath our feet, they scream it.
    Change! Change! Sing the newborn babies, crying
    Through their lifeless lips in affection.

    Then there are the few
    Of us. This word
    Cannot begin to describe what it entails, it is only
    Six small letters, too singular
    to fill those long fleeting
    Conversations which lead us from thought
    to silent dream.
    It's not change we don't wish
    to happen on, but that finality.
    This word is not enough but it is
    Growing on an addiction. It's a single song
    In this icy
    Muting consistency, hands that cling
    Grasping again and again in enthrallment
    And torture, a triumph, but a prehistoric
    Adaptation to famine. You can accept
    Or fight back.




    Submitted on 2007-09-04 06:01:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a bit more modern, perhaps, than i might prefer a poet to write. it loses its value when it refers to greeting cards rather than a loving heart...however...im no judge of a poet, and simply trying to be one of poetry, i should not bite off more than i can chew. i was reading through a piece by margaret atwood, i must say, you do write similarly. perhaps, not my style, like i was saying before, but, i do like the storybook like precedence you have, in your writing. it tells of an event, and a notion, not necessarily just a mere feeling. there are so many ideas in poetry, conflict is only natural, but who says we cannot enjoy the argument? i do believe this was well written...
    | Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]


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