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    dots Submission Name: The Story of Your Bodydots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I wish I had a better title for this, but it'll do until I come up with one.

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    dotsThe Story of Your Bodydots

    Every body has a story, and I want to read yours.
    The wisdom in your eyes, the coyness of your smile,
    I'd like to know their origins,
    and outside of your clothes,
    you have a grace unshown when you're covered,
    and looking at you makes me want to know
    the movements that built every muscle,
    the event behind every freckle, every scar,
    and I know that the story is a long book,
    but I'll not be greedy.
    I'll read you one day at time.

    Submitted on 2004-06-21 04:36:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very sensual piece...sexual, but in a subtle way...and double meaning...without clothes, or without pretentions and masks...when we see and feel the real person...

    that is what excites us...makes us want to see and feel more of that person.

    i really like this one...and i think there is a real story here...and the title really does Fit...

    | Posted on 2012-06-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Would you really want to read the body or are you like most women who have to switch off the light? Just teasing. For you, this was totally original, and I think that's good. Exploring beyond the front door... What shall we discover next?
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      great love poem. definitely not sappy but really good. remindes me a little bit of the song 'Your body is wonderland' by John Mayer. I like that song very much. and I like your poem very much. hopefully you have enough time to read the 'bodystory' of your boyfriend although he's far away.
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the line about wanting to know the movements that built every muscle. I enjoy the feeling of hot muscles after hard work. You are very good at avoiding cliché metaphors. Yours are so original. Some suggestions for an alternate title might involve some kind of book club, or remedial reading. But not "Book of the Month"!
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      im really liking this write...where do u get these wonderful ideas...your mind must be a wonderful place to explore such a creative mind...i swear...i must sound like a total bull sh*ter when i leave you comments...lol..im really liking lines three through five there awsome...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the title, actually. every body has a story... i like the ending, 'cause it shows how you want to savor this person page by page, as it were, 'cause there is so much to explore! it's cool the way you say how they are different when they are covered up. it is so true. i know that i feel different... i also feel different depending on what i'm wearing. if i don't feel real comfortable in what i've got on, it can color my whole day yuck. i just read eve's comment above, and i love that song "Your Body Is A Wonderland." this is very much like that, too! great job!
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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