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    dots Submission Name: frostdots
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    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 678
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 500



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    dotsfrostdots
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    the frost settles
    cool
    into the bones of my soul
    and i am freed
    from the roiling savagery
    of life
    the touch of unreality cools
    the throbbing passion in my breast
    to find something more
    to wipe away the cobwebs
    and put an end to my childish ways
    to the folly of youth
    and the tears of guilt
    all things become bearable
    in winters chill embrace
    even the bitter end
    of an unfullfilling life




    Submitted on 2007-09-04 18:37:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "The roiling savagery of life" a twice potent image this!! A terrific poem, extremely well done throughout, by a most deft hand, indeed! bravo... bravo... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey! what happeneed to my comment?
    there was only one word, that jarred which was " chill" as in winter's chill embrace,

    it sounded like it was not as well considered as the rest of the words which, inall of yer works, avoid common place phrASES...not that people go around saying "My! so cold...i felt zi was caiught in winter's chill embrace..."..perhaps a word implying pitilessness or eternalness...
    other than that, well crfted. koster
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by koster | [ Reply to This ]


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