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    dots Submission Name: Why the Cat Criesdots
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    Author: Derrick Thomas
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 21/59/39
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    dotsWhy the Cat Criesdots
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    i am dying
    it makes me sad
    im not done living
    but i am glad
    to have lived
    the way i lived
    the way i did
    before i died

    i'll see you on the other side
    i'll see you on the other side

    i'll see your face
    inside my mind
    i'll bide my time
    'til you arrive
    tear down the walls
    let the outside in
    it's dark right now
    but the sun will rise again

    i'll see you on the other side
    i'll see you on the other side




    Submitted on 2007-09-04 21:08:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your Words aere Very Very True and Right to the point
    I may be wrong here but I dont think you are referring to physically dying as in Leaving the Earth
    I Think you are referring to reborn life as in giving up the old and all the Negativity carrying it and Grasping on to a new life filled with only Positive energy
    Something I do for example every day of my life
    Everty day the sun shines is a new fresh start and a brand new life to me
    Thank You for sharing this
    It was a Pleasure reading your write

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-06-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      this strikes me as acoustically lyrical in its presentation... i can hear finger picked guitar with a quiet, grainy voice almost lamenting the words written here.

    i agree with the previous commenters that this is different from what we usually read from you but there is an element of rawness and beauty in here that cannot be overlooked.

    the idea of no regret is a good one.
    so many say if they could live their life over again they would do this or do that but i think being happy with the choices you have made and the curves life throws at you makes death easier... makes life easier... easier...


    why open a door when you can tear down a wall or two...?
    | Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This seems a little more elementary than what I normally read by you. However, it seems to convey your message rather plainly. I particularly like the title...attention grabbing...

    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      this is different for you
    im not sure what to think of it right now

    i love you
    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      almost like some sort of chant, a thought, murmured throughout a dream...a poetic bit of writing, though, i am questioning the completeness of it. dont you have more to say? why did you write this? why do you repeat yourself, when there is surely more to say? i thought the beginning was very well said, and surely is spoken well when read aloud, no doubts especially when read aloud by the author. but, as a reader, closing in on the final line, repeated for the 4th time by the very end, i wish there was more to describe the feeling, the idea, swelling inside my brain. inspiration does not need to left out, i mean, could you not bring justification to the reality of thought's comparison? or perhaps, the simple imagination, set upon a word, then two, then suddenly, a poem? im just curious, as to whether or not its finished, is all...
    | Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]


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