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    dots Submission Name: Lost Souldots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Description:
       My brother is back on his rampage and I just spit this out because I'm tired of giving and trying and encouraging and getting the brunt of his drunken displeasures.

    I love my brother and I always will - it's just difficult some times.

    Love,peace,joy & smiles to share

    tif


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    dotsLost Souldots
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    Where have you gone to Brother?
    All I see is this animal
    in your eye <@>

    When did darkness descend
    upon you and bleak your
    blue sky?

    Memories blurred
    alcohol to truth
    Stealing the future
    seizing your youth

    Lost Soul
    impossible to follow
    Blame & hatred
    is no place to wallow

    Why do you hurt us so
    with your words stinging foul?
    I gave my hand to feed you
    and all I got was a bite & a growl!

    Lost Soul
    stop searching
    for blame
    Find your self again
    and stop playing this game!






    Submitted on 2007-09-05 13:22:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, thats good, keep writing your good at it.....i wish i was good, but i critisize my work all the time......anyways, that was awesome....it reminds me of the poem i wrote to my mom......
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this is very way good and i am not sure my comments can equal up to those philosophical ones already given! but i think this is a very open and honest view into a very personal family issue. i know about this addiction cuz i have suffered from it myself, and i guess they say there two kinds of drunks, angry ones and happy ones. very sorry your brother is the angry kind. however, what i got from this despite the obvious, is your incredible amount of love, forgiveness and patience! you are a good soul and will reap the rewards of being so faithful to someone you love... perfecty expressed by this poem!
    | Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      I can feel the pain from a sister's point of view... my own brother says that boys or those grown up boys become very directionless sometimes and in such delicate moments they need love and understanding... this is a phase that should not be prolonged... i know you always keep on telling him how special he is in many matters... i hope he will come out of this phase... this shall pass too.

    I love your work as ever and this one touched me deeply.



    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      i still love your work. thanks for all the happy smiles. i need some light. your doing it for me. thanks so much and most of all thanks for being the ear i can talk to when im down.





    tina
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm...Sad to see the ones we love the most fall so hard. Rather it be drugs, alchohol or medications. It is never easy to watch, even harder to try to help. Especially when they do not want it. Its so hard to try and help them, make them understand you are not trying to hurt them by taking away their preferred drug of choice, that you wish only to help them. But they are blind to your pain and deaf to your cries. One day, your brother will realize what he is doing to you, just hope that it isnt too late when he does...

    ->Dark Angel
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      It is often next to impossible to find understanding for the antisocial behavior occasionally displayed by those around us who were once approachable. One can only hope that love and patience will outlast this anomally and allow us to be there when this lost soul reachs out.
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      Some people feel the world should revolve around them and they often fail to see how they disassociate themselves from the world due to thier state of mind. The earth accepts everyone...the ones who feel that the fruits of the earth are not of enough substance to nourish their lives are the souls who the earth admonishes. Whether by spiritual or man made means...the earth will devour them.

    This is not scripture...just observational fact.

    If one does not embrace the life they have been given then the life they have been given shall be swallowed by life...it is a fallacy among many mortals and one many mortals seem to always question...few of them ever accept it.

    All our brothers and sisters will get what they deserve...all us mortals can do is give them guidance.

    "In the hands of life, life will live...in the hand of life, life will give...in the life of evil, life will forgive...in a life of evils, lives will bring end...in the eyes of evil, life will soon end..."

    History sets the trend.

    Was that a comment or was I just going off on a triangular tangent???

    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent write, Tif! I'm a recovering alcoholic (I quit drinking in 1986), so I have a degree of understanding of your poem. Alcoholics get into denial so strongly, that they literally can't see the suffering and worry that they are causing to others! You've heard this before, but it literally takes them admitting they have a problem, and taking steps to do something about it!

    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very poignant, and to the point. I hope he reads this someday soon.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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