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    dots Submission Name: For Maggiedots
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    Author: eliwhitneyradio
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 49/51/13
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Childrens
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    Description:
       Poem I wrote about Maggie Simpson.


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    dotsFor Maggiedots
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    Every time I
    pass a fire
    each flame is

    a tongue shaped
    magnet on the
    empty refridgerator

    in your mouth.

    Baby stars wear
    hospital gowns of
    your skull while

    nervous mommies
    and daddies ring
    for the nurse

    through your lips.




    Submitted on 2007-09-06 01:08:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      um,

    i really dont understand...
    (weak mind?)

    maggie simpson?? How....?

    ?,
    carol
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Strange...

    I can't claim to really understand...

    But I do not like to read something and not comment...

    You have a terribly interesting style of writing.
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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