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    dots Submission Name: Kissing A Ventriloquist....dots

    Author: eliwhitneyradio
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 49/51/13
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsKissing A Ventriloquist....dots

    Full Title: Kissing A Ventriloquist And Fucking
    The Dummy

    Usually I play the role of a condom,
    spine wrapped around a sweaty hand.
    All year round I'm an eccentric glove,
    a schizophrenic mitten keeping words warm.

    Since my voice constantly changes
    I worship puberty, and the only gods
    are hormones I'll never posess.

    My job titles include:
    Banter's Piggy Bank, Humor's Trash
    Receptacle, Dummy, and
    Conversation's Suicide Note.

    People treat me like alcohol,
    I'm a reason to say what
    they usually wouldn't, an excuse
    with thick eyelids, no hangover

    Someday I'll swim the sea
    of speech like a whale
    and babble like a human.
    Training these mutant
    vocal chords not to blow
    a heart out the hole in my back.

    Submitted on 2007-09-06 01:10:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Outstanding. I knew there was some good stuff in here somewhere. I don't like profanity in poetry, but this was outstanding.
    | Posted on 2007-09-27 00:00:00 | by nsc | [ Reply to This ]
      Kind of reminds me of the later years of the child star Pinocchio, really interesting, great use of metaphors. I really love how you used the verbage to paint this dark cabaret style freakshow.
    Great write,
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
      You try too hard, and it's boring. You like to think you're eccentric, but no, not much there... Do you really have anything to say? Or, is your overuse of silly phrases a cover for the fact that you can not compose an original thought?

    You would love to be educated enough to be a critic, and throw your insults around. Maybe that makes you feel better about the crap you try to pass as art, but seriously, come down off your pedistal. You're just not that interesting...

    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by Wired | [ Reply to This ]

    some deep meaning that i hardly understand but i love the metaphors. and the tittle is awsome

    dismal_s child
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, that's very interesting...

    Don't know exactly what to say or how to feel about it...but you've definitely piqued my interest...

    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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