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    dots Submission Name: Chromatical Metaphysicsdots
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    Author: -Lith-Ium-
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 56/107/58
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsChromatical Metaphysicsdots
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    To dream a life in Alice Blue
    Sometimes like foam so light,
    Sometimes a sparkle, sometimes two,
    In Eyes for my delight.

    (I have a question of sublime
    Metaphysics of the Time...?!)

    To dream a line of Shocking Pink
    Of Lips forgotten in desire,
    To write a verse, ethereal ink
    Will become ice, then fire.

    (Another question : Can you race
    With metaphysics of the Space?!)

    To dream now a Cerulean dream,
    Within a real illusion
    It is like staring at the gleam
    Vibrating in a cold, cold fusion.

    (And THE question - Tempting Lie:
    Metaphysics of the "I" / Eye...)




    Submitted on 2007-09-06 09:34:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Um......
    What?
    No, I'm just kidding, but not really. I really do love this piece. Reading this was like sucking up a slurpee too fast, you keep doing it because it tastes so good, but it makes your head hurt. This is definately one of the most original things I've seen on ES, ever. That is very refreshing. A definate FAV.

    nicelyJ
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't really explain exactly why but I truly enjoyed the reading of this piece. It was a gentle quetioning and I really can't can't come up with any suitable answers.
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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