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    dots Submission Name: Haunteddots
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    Author: Raineyes
    ASL Info:    19/f/AR
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 208/187/46
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 122
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 996



    Description:
       I wrote this. It's a rough draft of the thoughts and images that I had. I haven't worked everything out in it yet. Please give me any helpful advise on making it better.


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    dotsHaunteddots
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    Angry voices
    Accusing and hurt
    Tearing at one another
    A man and a woman arguing
    Afraid and helpless
    Hearing chaos
    A baby girl crying
    Pleading for an end to it
    Wishing without words
    For peace in her home
    Shattering glass
    A picture flung in frustration
    A world torn asunder
    Startled silence
    A woman weeping
    Broken and caving in upon herself
    Smiling faces
    Staring frozen in time
    A man sobbing
    Torn and tormented to the edge
    Self-loathing
    Happiness distorted by cracks
    A baby crying
    In the aftermath
    An explosion
    The shock wave
    A family left in pieces
    Scattered on the ground
    Like broken glass
    Only wishing to be whole again
    Happy and secure
    Safe and warm in loves sweet embrace
    The day is lost
    The time is past
    Left in the debris
    A life haunted




    Submitted on 2007-09-06 10:51:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "A man and a woman arguing"

    Doesn't seem to go with the rest...maybe something like..."a man and a woman locked in battle" or something to that effect...

    Seemed like the only thing that was really off to me...
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]



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