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    dots Submission Name: Analyticaldots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAnalyticaldots
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    The wheel turns again,
    Another rotation,
    motion sick, I hurl, so,
    In covered notation,
    I write what I've learned,
    But I never tell,
    Listen in word,
    But purge it just as well,
    My new battle strategy,
    Yes I know they're after me,
    Just because it is,
    Doesn't mean it's how it has to be,
    On and on the gravity,
    Has me acting rapidly,
    Responding to the calm,
    Knowing there's another casualty,

    Dropping my heart rate,
    So all my senses fail,
    Inhale, exhale,
    My arms and fingers flail,
    I purge another dirge,
    As I lean against the rail,
    whipped inside, stripped of pride,
    Why am I impaled?
    Puzzled by sincerity,
    Loosing on my clarity,
    Spinning on a rope taut,
    With the most severity,
    On and on comparably,
    Sounding almost blaringly,
    The sound of losing hope,
    Whisper to me oh so merily...




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