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    dots Submission Name: locked up souldots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       i want this to be the last piece i ever write for this person, once again in a catagory of lost names. honestly, i doubt it will be. i like this piece better than the last few i have posted for him. i want to get over this writers block ive had lately. so instead of refusing to acknowledge what is going through my mind right now i accept it and will once again let my emotions be my inspirations.

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    dotslocked up souldots

    staring into the lost past
    with my face down to whats ahead
    looking for a future
    because i know the past is dead
    still trapped inside the eyes
    of whom cant see me anymore
    ive lost another key
    after sealing all the doors
    a sanctuary for my heart
    a curse they cant get past
    a padlock on a chain
    to know im safe at last
    but still i am here waiting
    for a return of what was mine
    so i can hide myself inside
    and start leaving you behind
    and love now turns to hate
    whats cold now, once was warm
    but im taking my heart back
    to keep it from your harm
    and im tearing up my notebooks
    which once recorded thoughts of you
    i dont want to remember
    all the pain you put me through
    and ill give away those pictures
    with holes burned in your eyes
    to know that you cant see me
    but still listen to my cries
    and just in case i ever meet you
    in a future i cant see
    im changing my whole life
    just so you cant see me
    and i'll start with my clothes
    and buy a wardrobe you dont know
    so if you ever walk past me
    youll continue to go
    and im changing all my lies
    so when if you ask youll never know
    of a past that i once had
    and a future i dont know
    if i ever met you again
    i would cry right in your face
    and still tell you that im happy
    so you dont think im a disgrace
    even a million years from now
    when you think the past is done
    ill remember what you did
    and remember that you won

    Submitted on 2007-09-06 13:52:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    yeah i agree with raivn this is a nice goodbye peice a sort of taking back my life kinda thing i got a similar one somewhere for some ex...

    perhaps this one will be the last of his poems...

    dismal_s child
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a magnificent "parting" piece from this person that has obviously caused you so much pain.

    "and just in case i ever meet you
    in a future i cant see
    im changing my whole life
    just so you cant see me"

    This is so awesome...such a great idea...

    I can't say much...this pushed all the right buttons...it makes me want to write something similar for my ex...but I'm not sure if I'm there yet...

    Congrats to you for being ready to let go of all of it!!!

    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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