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    dots Submission Name: Fallingdots

    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 727
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       I'm loving this... It completely reflects how I'm feeling and how most people feel when they start a new relationship with someone new... Let me know what you think.

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    What is this thing that you make me feel?
    Where is the pain I thought would never heal?
    I know that it's stupid to fall so fast,
    But I can't help but hope this feeling will last.
    Each night when I dream, you're who I see,
    Wishing and longing to feel you beside me.
    I wake in the morning with a sad kind of smile,
    Grateful that my dreams could sustain me for a while.
    And on the days I know I'll see you,
    I'm giddy and nervous, I barely know what to do.
    The moment your lips gently press to mine,
    My world becomes yours, and our passion stops time.
    We play and act silly, we're joking and carefree,
    With you it's okay for me to be me.
    You take my hand and hold me close to your heart,
    I know that I'm safe, that you'll keep me from harm.
    And yet again I wonder what this thing could be,
    I don't want to jinx it... We'll have to wait and see.

    Submitted on 2007-09-06 18:49:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aaaawwwh this is sweet!
    I can only hope that you're in love.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2009-01-04 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely put!

    I fear that it is very similar to other poems in the same category, and my only advice is to work on your descriptive words a little more to give it then just a cut and dry I'm happy with you sentiment.

    I very much liked this though! Good job.
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Destiny here

    uff the poem is realy good
    it reminded me so much of my love,
    anyone can feel love by reading this.

    love love love is what everyone need,Right


    good work, keep doing your job moving & ill keep reading ....

    good luck take care..

    | Posted on 2007-09-08 00:00:00 | by myself destiny | [ Reply to This ]
    Ahh the feeling of True Love
    You captured it very well in this write
    One can easily tell and feel just how important your Soulmate is to you
    Very well written and this really flows well in rhyme form
    Great Job!!
    God Bless
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It reminded me so much of my Michael. I'm glad you feel this way.

    Keep up the amazing work, and I'll keep reading

    Miss Haely
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so sweet...

    Just a lovely little, well, love poem...

    I think it's great.

    Good luck to you!
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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