sort of simple, really. im not quite sure if this would belong in a record of poetry or a children's book. more likely a children's book. not that this site is not open to all forms of writing, i just suppose when i opened this selection, i was preparing myself for something a bit deeper, a bit more complicated. not that your idea was terrible, it is actually quite clear, some people would have compromised it for sake of the poem's simplicity. but, other than that small, small compliment, i cannot offer anything else productive, for sake of what this piece just does not offer.