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    dots Submission Name: I Love Youdots
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    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 698
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 928



    Description:
       i havent written a love poem in a looooooooooooooooooooonnng time :- so, let me know what you think


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    dotsI Love Youdots
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    My angel, my heart
    My light in the dark
    You hold half of me
    Shall we never be apart

    I'm lost in your eyes
    Like the deep blue sea
    You're so precious to me
    As the air I breathe

    Your smile could illuminate
    Even the darkest of rooms
    Your voice my favorite sound
    A melodic tune

    I love you with all my heart
    Merely words from a pen
    There's no way to express
    How much I'll love you til the end

    No words to describe
    How you make me feel inside
    You are my world
    And without you I would die

    I savor every kiss
    And love each memory
    My hunny bunny baby :)
    Oh how much you mean to me

    I will never let you go
    For then I would be a fool
    So I want you to know
    Just how much I love you




    Submitted on 2007-09-07 05:27:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Most of this is good, but there are some sections that you could do much better on I believe. Continue to write though, you do have something worth being spoken and heard.
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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