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    dots Submission Name: Just Hold Medots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsJust Hold Medots

    I could see,
    The hurt,
    The struggle the pain,
    She was the love I wanted,
    And I loved her all the same,
    Childish really,
    Had thoughts of a marriage,
    Kids two of them,
    Twins in a carriage,
    But life never connects,
    It’s all the same,
    The ones I try to protect,
    Still get the pain,
    I never really think--
    But I always thought,
    The things I love in life,
    Were always uncaught,
    Unclasped, falling glass,
    As always I endeavor,
    Reminded in small ways,
    Nothing last forever,
    It shatters and I spill,
    My guts, the whole story,
    But still I see the love I had,
    In all it’s faded glory,
    I remember with her eyes pleading—
    She told me,
    “For a second, right here,
    Just hold me…
    Together let’s pretend,
    I’m you only , (If just a kiss)
    Till the end of the night,
    Swept so coldly, (Please just this0
    Then tomorrow you can,
    Leave me lonely, (If you wish)
    But please, for the moment,
    Just hold me…”

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      o.m.gosh. This was so amazing! so emotional, it painted a great picture, i love it! it was really sad, but really good!
    | Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see that you put your heart and soul into this piece and I do applaud you for that, but I think you can write this in a much more interesting and exciting way. It seems to be spoon fed to the reader in my opinion, but anyway continue to work on your poems.
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this, the poem has so much emotion behind it i didn't expect this when i clicked on it. very well written. JOanna
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]

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